Hi Gerco,
I have a small number of comments:
Title: Since this is not the first time results of a search to this deay are reported, and since there is still no convincing evidence of KsKK, wouldn't it make more sense to present this as an "Update of branching fraction measurements for Kshh", and report the KsKK as part of that?
Abstract: * an "indication is obtained" sounds pathetic, if the level of significance is not given. Why not write "An indication/hint at the level of 2.5 sigma is obtained"? * remove the sentence about the forthcoming Dalitz analysis. (There is little scientific knowledge in a promise.)
L9: rephrase "theoretical applications ... can be identified". We do measurements to build a theory, or to compare to theory, but not to apply them in a theory.
L24: add a reference to this statement (and consider to rephrase, because hard to read)
L88: triggers are not 'installed', but rather 'deployed'
L100: the "direction of the momentum vector" of the B is a kinematic quantity (it is eta/phi) and not a topological one. Probably you mean something else here, such as the angle between the vector between the PV and SV and the direction of the B, or the B IP, or IPCHI2.
L256: by extracting the weighted efficiency using sweighted events from data, you introduce a statistical correlation between the efficiency and the statistical error. This correlation can be quite substantial. (It theory, it could be 100%.) You don't report it, and it is unclear how you deal with it.
L392: It is unclear what you mean with the result below line 392. It cannot be both a single sided 90% upper limit (L390) and a (symmetric?) 90% confidence interval.
I hope this helps ... good luck:-)
Thanks, Wouter
On 01/05/17 16:33, Gerco Onderwater wrote:
Dear all,
I just discovered that Groningen (and hence Nikhef) is assigned the review of the draft below. As there will no bfys meeting between now and the deadline, I propose that I collect your comments and send them in.
Greetings,
Gerco
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*From: *Fergus Wilson <Fergus.Wilson@stfc.ac.uk mailto:Fergus.Wilson@stfc.ac.uk> *Subject: **First circulation of publication draft for PAPER-2017-010, Search for the decay $B^0_s \to K^0_S K^+ K^-$* *Date: *28 April 2017 at 13:25:13 GMT+2 *To: *"lhcb-general (LHCb General mailing list)" <lhcb-general@cern.ch mailto:lhcb-general@cern.ch> *Cc: *"LHCb-PAPER-2017-010-reviewers (LHCb-PAPER-2017-010-reviewers)" <LHCb-PAPER-2017-010-reviewers@cern.ch mailto:LHCb-PAPER-2017-010-reviewers@cern.ch> *Resent-From: *<c.onderwater@cern.ch mailto:c.onderwater@cern.ch>
Dear Colleagues,
A draft paper is available for your comments.
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Title : Search for the decay $B^0_s \to K^0_S K^+ K^-$
Journal : JHEP Contact authors : Louis_Henry, Christos_Hadjivasiliou Reviewers : Bernardo_Adeva (chair), Alberto_Lusiani EB reviewer : Alberto_Correa_dos_Reis EB readers : Mike_WIlliams, Patrick_Koppenburg Analysis note : ANA-2014-043 Deadline : 12-May-2017 e-group : lhcb-paper-2017-010-reviewers Link : https://cds.cern.ch/record/2261508 Authors : LHCb Twiki : https://twiki.cern.ch/twiki/bin/view/LHCbPhysics/B2KshhBFAnalysis
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- Gerco
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