Hi, here are my comments to the baryon asymmetry paper.

First of all a great result that indeed deserves attention.

However, perhaps it is due to the fact that I have been on holidays, but I find the language in the paper far too technical for Nature. I think it is not written with a reader of Nature in mind. It is often small things that we take for granted in eg a PRL paper, but that should be done a bit more carefully for nature. eg: "the sum of two Crystal Ball functions[ref]" is not a format of language I would use in Nature. 

clearly some illustations would help, eg Feynman diagrams and the event planes defining the angle Phi and the triple products.

As usual we describe the selection process, the precise definitions of observables and all details, but we could also chose to describe things one abstraction level higher and leave out some details that matter less for nature. And add some explanations of the ideas behind.

Examples:
- line 32 eq (3): it is not a priory clear why A_T + A_T-bar is P-violating,while A_T - A_T-bar is CP violating. I find it very difficult to "see through" the triple product definitions and interpret that. Perhaps this can be explained a bit more.

- line 35: I also doubt that Nature readers appreciate the rich resonant substructure of the three particle phase space. 

- line 38: Same comment for the "nonvanishing difference in CP invariant phase".

- line 45: what are "localised CPV effects". (Dalitz phase space is behind)

- lines 119 - 125 are "dense" to read.

On the two binning schemes:
Scheme A is mainly resonance contributions while scheme B exploits interferences. So what? What is the idea behind?
p-value A = 4.9 x 10^-2  (2 sigma)
p-value B = 7.1 x 10^-4  (3.4 sigma)
--> Do we expect such a behaviour? Yes, becaus of interferences, but no text is spend on this.

Why is the product of the two p-values of the binning schemes the best thing to look at (3.3 sigma) and not just scheme B? And forget abut scheme A?

I realize that I would have a hard time "explaining" this people to outsiders...

cheers,
- Marcel


On 21 July 2016 at 03:35, Patrick Koppenburg <Patrick.Koppenburg@cern.ch> wrote:
Hi all,

I was expecting no replies. Please read the paper and send me your comments. There's likely to be some noise about it, so you may get asked questions by your non-LHCb colleagues. The best way to be informed about (and influence) the content is to read it now.

The next paper assigned to us will be that to be approved today https://indico.cern.ch/event/558480/ . It's tt, W+bb and W+cc cross-sections (to go to paper) but it will be followed by a CONF on Higgs->bb and Higgs->cc. I understand this will also be assigned to us.

Cheers,

Patrick



On 07/18/2016 04:03 PM, Patrick Koppenburg wrote:
Dear all,

There's an important paper for us: The first evidence of CP violation in baryons. It would also be our 2nd paper going to Nature Physics.

Anyone volunteering to collect comments?

Thanks

Patrick


-------- Forwarded Message --------
Subject: First circulation of publication draft for PAPER-2016-030, Probing matter-antimatter asymmetries in $\Lambda^0_b$-baryon decays
Date: Mon, 18 Jul 2016 15:32:41 +0200
From: Michael Schmelling <Michael.Schmelling@mpi-hd.mpg.de>
To: LHCb General mailing list <lhcb-general@cern.ch>


Dear Colleagues,

A draft paper is available for your comments:

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Note that in view of ICHEP the circulation has been shortened from 2 weeks to 10 working days.

Title           : Probing matter-antimatter asymmetries in $\Lambda^0_b$-baryon decays

Journal         : Nature Physics
Contact authors : Jinlin_Fu, Nicola_Neri, Maurizio_Martinelli, Andrea_Merli
Reviewers       : Steve_Playfer (chair), 
                  Mike_Sokoloff
EB reviewer     : Mat_Charles
EB readers      : Michael_Schmelling, Simon_Eidelman
Analysis note   : ANA-2014-077
Deadline        : 29-Jul-2016
e-group         : lhcb-paper-2016-030-reviewers
Link            : https://cds.cern.ch/record/2199884
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Twiki           : https://twiki.cern.ch/twiki/bin/viewauth/LHCbPhysics/LambdabTophhh

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