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6 Aug 2015

  Here are my comments. Any volunteer?

  Cheers,

  Patrick

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  Dear Giulia, Vanya,

  Here are a few comments on the nicely written Y paper

  Physics: I am not fond of systematics being put for "fit range". They tend to double-count the
  statistical uncertainty. If you find something consistent, don't count is, if not investigate
  (that was the case for the exclusive Upsilon paper). Also, it's not clear which effect the use
  of sPlot is catching.

  I hoped I would find all mass fits for all bins in the ANA but did not (please add them). Have
  you visually inspected them all? The last Pt bin at 4<y<4.5, which has low stats: how
  correlated are the uncertainties of the 2S and the 3S? Do you take it into account when doing
  the ratio?

  L.4: partons, providing
  L.5 and 6: replace one of the "available" by a synomym
  L.7: Why the small space in NRQCD? Generally
  L.22: there's no question above. puzzle?
  L.26: and so? You should write here that we do not distinguish directly and feed-down
  bottomium. It seems this standard paragraph is missing.
  L.28: 2.76, 7 and 8 TeV
  L.33: you use data, not 1/pb. -> using data corresponding ...
  L.36: when going -> between
  L.88 to 108: It's not always clear when you man "any" Upsilon or an unspecified Y(nS). For
  instance N(Y->mumu) in eq 1 means the same as N(Y(iS)->mumu) in eq.2. Then you say N(Y->mumu)
  in eq 2 has the same meaning as in 1, but there is no such quantity. I suggest you always spell
  out nS.
  Eq.1: It's a neat idea to use the square as index (is that what you do?), but this character is
  often used by applications to mean "I don't find this special character", so I would avoid it.
  My first impression was that miss some font. I suggest \text{bin} instead.
  L.105: remove event
  Fig.1 caption and many more: you have some non standard space after TeV. Put a normal space.
  4.0 -> 3.5
  L.119-126: All sentences are built as "spam is good while the parrot is dead". Please rephrase
  some.
  L.141-4: was -> is. were -> are (2x)
  L.152-3: I don't understand how you do this.
  L.155: high statistics is jargon
  L.156: imperfection
  L.172: which effect? There's no effect being described here. You mean differences between data
  and simulation?
  L.185: how correlated are the 0.65% precisions at 7 and 8 TeV? Do they cancel in ratios?
  L.200-202: In the J/psi paper they give a table to show the effect. Is that an option here?
  L.217: CSM is undefined (CS is)
  Fig.2: we usually put labels at the right. Why don't you use the Lafferty prescription here?
  Table: you seem to stick to the rule of how many digits should be shown, but in some cases that
  makes little sense. Like 0.357\pm0.031 could be aligned with the other ones.
  L.248: This sentence needs a rewrite. A rise wrt what?
  L.258: what is "standard quarkonium"? and hybrid?

  Acknowledgements: I suggest to start with thanking the people who provided predictions (is this
  being what's in literature?) then _also_ thank those with whom you had discussions without
  repeating anyone.

  Fig.6: here too, there's strange spacing after (top) and (middle). Why don't the vertical axis
  labels align at the top?

  Ref. [17] is there anything in the thesis you need that is not in [16]?
  Ref. [47] and [49]: is there anything you need that is not in [48]?

  Cheers,

  Patrick

  On 06/08/15 09:14, Patrick Koppenburg wrote:
  Hi all,

  Here's the Upsilon paper, with some interesting observations on differences between 2011
  and 2012 muon triggers.

  Cheers,

  Patrick

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  First circulation of publication draft for PAPER-2015-045, Studies of forward production
  of $\Upsilon$ mesons in $pp$ collisions at $\sqrt{s}=7$ and 8 TeV
  Date:
  Wed, 5 Aug 2015 15:36:40 +0000
  From:
  George Lafferty <george.lafferty@manchester.ac.uk>
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  Dear Colleagues,

[Bfys-physics] Fwd: First circulation of publication draft for PAPER-2015-045, Studies of forward production of $\Upsilon$ mesons in $pp$ collisions at $\sqrt{s}=7$ and 8 TeV

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